Tutor Feedback – Assignment 5

I had my final assignment tutor feedback on 27 April 2020. We kept the session fairly short as my tutor was still recovering from the Covid virus. She sent over a few notes to which I responded. As usual my comments/reflections are in italics below.

Feedback on assignment

Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of Creativity

Introduction – do think about an explanatory paragraph before the video to explain what the viewer will see.  With so much text within the video, it is helpful to set the scene.

I have brought my explanatory sentence up from the Assessment criteria section and included it just above the video. I have also created a separator between the background and my ‘methodology’.

Evaluation to explore more how effects of isolation and COVID-19 has directed the work – i.e. what would you maybe have done.

I have included a couple of thoughts on this, namely possible access to the museum and contacting some survivors.

Sound – possibly fade down at the end – we discussed this and the limitations of using PowerPoint against learning a whole new software package.

I agree that the drum beat ending is a little abrupt, but the only way that I could possibly ‘fade’ it out would be to length the time the credit slides remain on screen but as the drum loop is 79 seconds in length this would cause the credit slides to have more visual screen time than some of the image slides. As those slides are probably the least interesting for a viewer I don’t think it warrants allocating the extra time to them. I also mentioned that I’m not sure if I will ever have the need to use Adobe Premiere in the future and considering the huge learning curve attached to that program, I’ll live with the abrupt ending.


Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity

This is now all completed.


Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

Vast range of research.

The Magnum conversations are here:


Thank you for this link. I’ll add it to my list to watch.

In light of the research you have done, you could consider a comparison between how work is presented eg Mary Kelly vs Jo Spence.

I’ll add a comment to one of their blog posts that I’ve done.

UPDATE: Since watching many online presentations and talks during COVID-19, I have decided to expand my comments to include those photographers as well and have written up a separate blog post to this effect.

Learning Log

Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis

This continues to be detailed with a wide range of resources viewed.  Do consider making notes on what online presentations work well and what doesn’t – thinking ahead here to Level 3.

Will do. UPDATE: See Comparison of who work is presented.

Suggested reading/viewing


This was a key book in reviewing archive material:


Thank you for the link. It’s a little more expensive here in Canada – $32. I’ll see if I can obtain a copy. I do have a copy of Marianne Hirsch’s Family Frames Photography, Narrative and Postmemory book which also deals with the Holocaust and memory.

 Pointers for the next assignment / assessment

Please inform me of how you would like your feedback for the next assignment: written or video/audio.

Video please

Strengths Areas for development
Video uses archive footage to intersperse with own images Introduction paragraph above video giving outline of what is about to be seen.
Development of work for pre-assessment tutorial  Complete evaluation of course
Range of resources watched during isolation Keep adding to the bank and taking the notes.  I am sure some of it will be useful for Level 3